Overture page 7

There are people who can sound really eloquent when they're upset. I am not one of those people. Of course if you really make me mad, I'll pass out, so I'm an outlier, but even so- most people don't get real coherent under pressure, and it kind of bugs me how many characters go Gettysburg Address in settings where they should be reduced to ninnyhammerage.

Anyway.
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Ok, I am going to say something nice about this page. I like the way it sets up to transistion to next page. There. That was positive.

That said, I am using the right to completely redo these first 20 pages as bait to keep a productive schedule through the end of the year. I get the rest of the first book up, I get to correct things here. Oh god, so much to correct.